The fingers of vertigo tickled, teased. Kate carefully took two steps backwards. Away from the cliff.
Oh, this is great! I love the personification of vertigo. And I love the last sentence, how it is a separate sentence to draw attention to itself. It works really well. Great job!I want to read your book. :)
OooOOOooo. I got shivers, because I'm terrified of heights!
Very nice. It feels like a conversation. :D
ooooooh nice. I'm an adrenaline junkie so I wanted her to step forward but it gave me that "woo hoo" feeling when I read it. :)
Love this excerpt. Reads so smooth. It made me feel like I was watching Kate. :)
Man, I simply love this book!
Great tension in those few lines!
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