Thursday, June 11, 2009

Illusions Mini Excerpt

The fingers of vertigo tickled, teased. Kate carefully took two steps backwards. Away from the cliff.

7 comments:

Lady Glamis said...

Oh, this is great! I love the personification of vertigo. And I love the last sentence, how it is a separate sentence to draw attention to itself. It works really well. Great job!

I want to read your book. :)

B.J. Anderson said...

OooOOOooo. I got shivers, because I'm terrified of heights!

Danyelle said...

Very nice. It feels like a conversation. :D

Karen Amanda Hooper said...

ooooooh nice. I'm an adrenaline junkie so I wanted her to step forward but it gave me that "woo hoo" feeling when I read it. :)

Robyn said...

Love this excerpt. Reads so smooth. It made me feel like I was watching Kate. :)

Sarah Jensen said...

Man, I simply love this book!

Angela said...

Great tension in those few lines!